Thread:Zergrinch/@comment-24801547-20140421052243/@comment-4928331-20140425070213

General Comments:
 * 1) Learn to capitalize properly.  The "Team" is always a proper noun.  First letters in a sentence and names should be capitalized.
 * 2) Don't use run-on sentences.
 * 3) My goodness, run your stories through a spell-checker.
 * 4) Separate sentences with periods.  For example: the team is gettinge ready for a mission."this time be serious"batman said the team go on the sewer and find someone "hello?" superboy said.  That's just one sentence, and it's full of syntax problems.

Plot Comments:
 * 1) Why would Batman send the Team to "find someone"?  You need something more compelling.
 * 2) All of a sudden you are calling this someone a vigilante.  Why?  Did he beat up some bad guys?
 * 3) Sewers in Rhode Island do not lead to underground caves
 * 4) What knocked out the Team?  How did they do it?  How is it possible to sedate them for over four hours?
 * 5) Do you seriously think being tied up is going to bother most of the Team?  Come on, you're dealing with Superboy, Lagoon Boy, and Zatanna.  Even being restrained is nothing more than an inconvenience for Tim Drake.
 * 6) So are they pursuing someone, a vigilante, or a scientist?
 * 7) Zatanna uses backwards spells.  What on Earth is "Tei Him Sknot" supposed to be?
 * 8) Tigress has nothing to do with the plot.  And why should the location be unknown?
 * 9) "Such a powerful source" is an extremely weak dialogue, and doesn't fit.  Batman is a detective - he would be theorizing about the motivations of the scientist, and be concerned about his whereabouts.

Overall, I rate it a 1. It's not a coherent story, and it's poorly written.